Ethnography post Revision
After being so utterly done with the food at the DUC, I began my journey
to the highly regarded Cox Hall to find any other food resource that wouldn’t
be the classic grilled chicken, limited salads, and fattening ice cream. Most
students speak of Cox Hall as the food haven at Emory. Due to the fact that
they do not accept Meal Swipes, I had left it as one of my last food options.
On Thursday, I decided to spend my Dooley dollars and make my much anticipated
visit to Cox for an early lunch.
As I enter through the transparent doors, I see various shapes and
colors adorning the walls and ceiling. It immediately reminds me of a shopping
mall food court. I was surprised to find such a crowded space so
early in the day. The atmosphere is considerably different and diverse from
that of many of Emory’s dining options. Here you encounter people like
upperclassmen, professors, doctors, nurses, and medical students. The open
structure and array of tables make the room look spacious even with its
congested lines. After being hit with the wave of people, you are rapidly
bombarded with a variety of options.
Something from every cuisine you can crave. Cox offers endless
possibilities, from grilled burgers to fresh salads, creamy pasta, flavorful
Indian and Asian food, spicy tacos, and crepes. An aroma of diverse cultures
and flavors surrounded me while I was trying to choose the station I wanted to
eat. The smells reminded me of a home cooked meal made by any fancy or family
restaurant. As I survey the stations, I opted for the sweet, spicy, and exotic
smelling Indian Bhojanic. Anxiously waiting in line, I realized I only have
twenty-five minutes before my next class. I decided to sacrifice my craving for
Indian Bhojanic and go for the pre-packaged sushi. I passed the lengthy and
slow line and struggled to find an empty seat. .
Thankfully I ran into one of my hall mates who was also having lunch,
and I sat with her. I saw her plate of Asian fusion food bowl filled with spicy
chicken, brown rice, scallions, and ginger infused soy sauce. I take a look at
my pre-packed sushi with an unfulfilled look and take my first bite of my
California roll. My friend urges me to try some of her bowl. The chicken was
delicious, crunchy with a thick sweet sauce and fluffy brown rice. A big plus
to this meal is that it comes in a to-go box, which makes it most convenient
for any college student’s late night snack.
Overall Cox offers something different for any Emory first year student
that looks for any change in their meal diets or if they are just simply tired
of microwaving mac and cheese or eating at the DUC. It offers variety, good
flavor, and new faces. As said by a current first-year student Carla Rodriguez:
“ it is a nice alternative to the monotonous DUC food, plus the taste and
quality are a hundred times better”. The only complain of most students is the
price (approximately $8-12). Sara Laher said she would go to Cox Hall almost
every day if they accepted meal swipes. According to Emory students, Cox Hall
proves to be one of the best culinary choices on campus, with its only
downsides being price and crowdedness.
I still spot a couple of sentence-level errors (i.e. verb tense consistency: "I realized I only have twenty-five minutes" should be "I realized that I only had twenty-five minutes"), and the beginning of the final paragraph still comes across more as a review/opinion rather than qualitative description/ethnography. You improved the last sentence with the addition of "According to Emory students," although I would push you to be more specific: which Emory students? Has a specific person/set of people told you this? Or did you draw evidence from Facebook, or any other sources?
ReplyDeleteOverall, I think you could have done more with this revision, although the content of the post itself is still quite good.
Grade: Check