Cooking Show Script

Reflection 

One of my favorite blog posts is this reaction to how food relates to gender. When I first thought about writing it; I wanted to employ my personal experience as the primary evidence. I conveyed this in a very efficient way but missed some of the marks regarding grammar, diction, and imagery. My main flaw in writing has always been grammar; I tend to be careless and unfocused in this aspect. This ultimately leads to many  that negatively impact my works. I specifically struggle with punctuation. 

Recently I have had some of my friends look over my final papers which I think has helped improved this situation. To particularly fix this flaw, I will have to write my papers in advance so my peers can revise them. Regarding diction, I tried to use a more accurate and precise vocabulary but many times missed the mark, as my vocabulary is not as extensive as that of others. To address this I will spend more time in thesaurus searching for good synonyms for some of my words. I will also try to eliminate wordiness by using specific words. For example, this sentence is particularly wordy: “My grandmother would spend countless hours slaving away over a hot stove cooking all the food, making sure it was made freshly with quality ingredients and delicate techniques." In the future, I will try to shorten the length of my sentences to make my writing easier to read. Finally, I also aim to be more descriptive and include more imagery in my writing. My descriptions should invoke different senses and engage the audience.  For example, this sentence is one of my favorites as it includes detailed descriptions: “This famous dessert is made using a special bread, dipped in an egg, cinnamon, and sugar mixture, then fried until the perfect crunchiness and soaked overnight in a thick sugary syrup.” The only element I would add to this sentence is a description of the scent. This would help develop a better picture for the reader.  As for grammar, there are a few punctuation errors through the piece specifically with the incorrect usage of semi-colons.

Overall this is my favorite blog post because it is a very personal experience and reaction, to a topic. It also illustrates the relationship I had with my grandmother and her expectations of me, while also effectively conveying the role of women in a male-dominated society.

Revision Homesick Pie

Take the golden flaky pie crust and place it in the middle of the decorative baking sheet. Slow cook cinnamon caramel apples with housewarming spices such as nutmeg, cinnamon, and vanilla. These pleasant aromas will immediately transport you to the chilly autumnal afternoons spent in your grandmother’s kitchen. Make sure to use granny smith apples which will balance the sweetness of the ingredients.  

In a medium heat pan, toss the apples and add a blend of brown sugar butter and the spices. Separately heat caramels to make a decadent sauce and pour it into the base of the crispy crust. Layer the tantalizingly sweet apple filling and add another layer of caramel to top off your mouthwatering creation. When the crust reaches a golden brown, serve the warm scrumptious pie with a scoop of vanilla bean ice cream to have all your trouble washed away.

"The Cookie"

     In "The Cookie"  by Marcel Proust, the author is transported to a memorable time in his childhood just by the bite of a simple madeline and a sip of tea. This bite opened a window into his spirit “ I raised to my lips a spoonful of the tea in which I had soaked a morsel of the cake. No sooner had the warm liquid mixed with the crumbs touched my palate than a shudder ran through me and I stopped, intent upon the extraordinary thing that was happening to me. An exquisite pleasure had invaded my senses, something isolated, detached, with no suggestion of its origin.”.  This cookie filled him, made him whole again, and awarded him with this state of ecstasy. He experienced joy, love, and happiness. 

    After being mesmerized by this mouthful, he pondered about where all of these feelings came from, and why did his meal awaken them. He took another bite in hopes of trying to find its meaning. As he ate more, the anticipation and exquisiteness diminished. He inhibited all of his senses and just focused on remembering Finally, after much reflection, it came to him as a moment of insight. The taste of the madeleine transported him to Sunday mornings at Combray. This mornings were characterize by his visits to his aunt Léonie's bedroom, where she would give him a share of a madeleine dipped in tea.  From this memory, he began to recall an array of different places and times in his little old town: "the house, the town, from morning to night and in all weathers, the Square where I used to be sent before lunch, the streets along which I used to run errands, the country roads we took when it was fine. " All of these had been suppressed for a long time, but all came to life in his cup of tea. 

Homesick Pie 

You start off with a golden flaky pie crust. Place it in a decorative baking sheet.  Fill it with a mixture of cinnamon caramel apples. Slow cook them with a diverse mixture of various housewarming spices like nutmeg, cinnamon, and vanilla. These smells will transport you to the aroma of your grandmother’s kitchen in the fall. Make sure to use granny smith apples which will offset the sweetness of the ingredients.
  Toss the apples in a medium heat pan and add blend of brown sugar butter and the spices. Separately make a decadent gooey caramel. This caramel mixture would go directly on the pie crust then the apples layered one on top of the other in an orderly matter. Then add some of the caramel to top it off and add another layer of pie crust. Once you take it out of the oven, serve immediately. Add a scoop of ice cream to the warm scrumptious pie and have all your trouble washed away.

Reflection 

The peer review suggestions were extremely helpful. I plan on implementing them into all my blog post. Both suggestions included focusing on grammar and word choice which I know I need to pay more attention too. I plan on giving my post to more people for them to revise them. Other suggestions included adding more backgrounds information to one of the posts and making the main point more evident. I have extensive information on my research blog, which I plan to include to make the blog post more through. Finally, some styling suggestions were made advising me to add some bold areas and make the recipes one of the focus points.